Hello @youngladpaul365,
Welcome to the Inkwell community. We welcome short story writers of all skill levels. You seem to have a knack for writing, and that's great. We do have rules for participation. One of these is that a story must be complete. That is, no chapters, no continuations. Given that rule, it is evident that this story cannot be curated as you offer it today.
The tale is engaging. The dialogue is well presented. The characters are interesting, believable.
In order to orient yourself to the community for future publications, we suggest that you read the rules and our Manifesto. Also, all images must be credited to a free (no copyright restrictions) source. This is a Hive rule, not just an Inkwell rule.
We thank you for sharing your story with us and hope to hear from you in the future.
No we will NOT. Time to fall off your chair for real now!