This is such a sensitive portrayal of a child isolated by mental illness (unless you are suggesting in the story that something supernatural is occurring). Her use of the earphones is a great detail. It shows readers how the child struggles with a problem that tortures her. Adding another character, Peter, is also a good technique for giving readers insight into how Cassie appears to others.
Although it is true that many people with mental illness do not receive appropriate care, it would improve the story tremendously if you indicated what eventually happened to Cassie. A sentence, even explaining her fate would be much more satisfying.
This would be a perfect fit for this week's prompt: Change. You might like to link to the story under the prompt post.
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Thank you for the feedback. The focus wasn't really on what happened to Cassie, but on the aftermath of the whole scenario. But since it's a good suggestion, thank you!
And I guess I should link it as you said it's a perfect fit for the week's prompt.