This is a gripping and emotionally charged story! You did a fantastic job building tension throughout, from Lilian's initial doubts to the intense moment when she confronts Percy. The character of Nosy Rose adds a layer of drama, acting as the catalyst that pushes Lilian to confront her fears, and the pacing is perfect as the story unfolds. I love how Lilian’s inner turmoil is portrayed—you can really feel her frustration and anxiety, and the twist with Percy being calm while hiding the truth keeps the reader hooked. The moment when Lilian discovers the truth on the hidden camera is powerful, a heartbreaking yet empowering revelation that leads to her decisive action.
The story captures the complexity of trust and betrayal so well, and Lilian’s emotional journey is relatable, especially how quickly love can turn into rage when deception is uncovered. The final scene, with her tossing Percy’s things out and locking the door, gives a sense of closure and empowerment. Overall, it's a well-crafted story that balances suspense, emotion, and a satisfying ending. Great work!