You captured the chaotic rush of a morning gone wrong quite vividly, Medemausi! Your descriptions of each misfortune, from the lack of water to the puddle splash, really made me feel the character's frustration and exhaustion. The relatable experiences—like waking up groggy, dealing with an unexpected broken machine, and the dreaded stern professor—added a touch of humor, even if it was laced with exasperation.
I especially appreciated how you included the character's internal thoughts, which made the reader empathize with their struggle while adding a bit of dark humor. The line about the street being called "Death holes in pot holes" had me smiling—it was a creative way to highlight the difficulty of navigating such a rough path.
One suggestion would be to simplify some of the sentence structures to make the story flow more smoothly. At times, the sentences felt a bit long or complex, which could break the pacing of the narrative. Shortening some of them could add more rhythm, enhancing the sense of urgency.
Overall, this was a relatable and entertaining read. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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Thank you for the suggestion @ultimatewrestlin , a friend of mine did mentioned this too. How my sentences could sometimes sound complex and consequently, making it difficult for my readers in digest and flow with my thought.
I thought have changed that about my writings,little did I know I didn't.
Going forward, I'll pay close attention to that.
Thank you once more. @ultimatewrestlin