RE: Mystery of the Sinkhole | Fiction

[viceroyklayd]

No. Maybe I need to edit it. But it's up to reader's interpretation since it's what I considered the sinkhole's mystery.

But this was a not really a dream since admins advised to avoid dream sequences since it tricked the readers.

Comments

[itsostylish]

I really thought that this was descriptive, insightful and unique. This line led me to think that this was a dream.

She opened her heavy eyes. Sunlight had already found its way through the thick canopies of trees and tents towards her face. The lush vegetation appeared greener and more alive, and some flowers bloomed from the touch of morning dew. The birds were chanting their songs. Again.

[viceroyklayd]

I see. Thank you.
Maybe I'll add more sentence to describe what's really happening and what's the mystery.

[itsostylish]

That would be a good idea. It’s a good story