Greetings dear @agmoore
Thank you very much for your excellent comment; It is very pleasing for me to know that you took the time to detail and consider my story as enjoyable; even more to suggest me how to improve it for the future.
To be very honest, I have always been a fan of well-written stories, those that make you imagine the narrative details that revolve around this one, but I am quite new to writing, and I don't quite understand the pause between paragraphs, but I do understand from your analysis, how a reader may have missed that connection between the description of the first man and his entrance on the scene, during the story narrated by the father to his son. I think there were a few lines missing to enrich the story.
I also know that I still have a lot to read, a lot to practice and learn, so I think I'm in the right place. That's the main reason why I joined @theinkwell.
Thank you 😊