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RE: Passionate Couple. Unfortunate Problems. Almighty's Grace!

in 500 Words a day4 years ago

Another interesting and varied post form you. Well done. I like the concept behind it and the story line that you are running with.

If i could give you a small bit of advice on writing and i would guess that English might not be your first language. It is just the flow of the story. How one sentence flows into the next. Yours tend to stop and then another sentence and stop. It's only a small thing but they don't blend into each other as much as you would read in a proper book which allows you to get lost in the story. Just a small observation from my side that you don't need to pay attention to if you don't want. But if you would like to keep improving it could be an area to strengthen.

Apart from that it was a great piece of writing and one that I enjoyed. Keep up the good work. 😁

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Hello Sir,

To begin with, let me thank you from the bottom of my heart for your Invaluable Response and Feedback!

My joy knew no bounds on seeing your message. My mind is filled with positive energy and rejuvenated!

Yes Sir, you are right. In the past, this is much more worse, but reduced to some extent, but not enough. I have been trying hard to nullify this discontinuity, but the story continues.

But, I will not leave the story unfinished. I am determined to correct myself at any cost.

This is my challenge, Sir.

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