Outstanding work. While watching the video, I was thinking it might have been some attempt at a modernization of Anglo-Saxon half lines, with internal alliteration. Truly fascinating to see that you were reaching for inspiration from Middle Eastern forms.
I like the audio and wish more creators would attempt such. Poetry has always been the most deeply implemented of the literary forms.
Thank you for your insightful comment @strivenword
Certainly, I wasn't consciously reaching for Anglo-Saxon half lines, but I was definitely trying to meld older styles of poetry with some more modern techniques. I love writing in form, and the Ghazal is beautiful, and it made sense to me almost inhabiting the mind of a Skald Viking poet that they might have come across this form while travelling, as the Vikings were prodigious traders as well as raiders and settlers, lol, I guess the trading part doesn't make it in modern dramas as much as its not so glamorous.
Anyway, my personal style when writing modern free-verse leans a lot on trying to construct clever in-line rhyming with what I hope is reasonably unique imagery etc. I really like the idea of trying to combine these more modern styles and elements of poetry into more rigid forms. Purists would probably say I'm just being lazy as form should be strict, the whole point is to stick to the form. And I agree there is a place for that, and sometimes really love the challenge of writing say a Shakespearean sonnet in strict iambic pentameter sticking to the rhyming scheme, but I also think there is space for experimentation and evolution.
In fact, I think experimentation and evolution are essential in poetry to keep it interesting and relevant, as it is something of a niche art form. I performed this poem at a poetry night in my home town and it went down well, and someone told me in a discussion afterwards that they recognised that I'd strayed just a little from the form, but that it worked in this case.
Anyway, I'm rambling... 😂 thanks again for your comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed the performance and video 👍🙂