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RE: Tomorrow's Daughter - Part 2/6

in Scholar and Scribe6 months ago

Intriguing.
I will have to read the first part and look forward to more also.
I hope this is met well.. Because it is offered with love only, puro.. And offered because you seem like a serious writer.
If it is unwelcome, then I will in advance and ask you to let me know.. I'll keep reading and keep my comments to myself.

I think the waiter should have "brought" the coffee instead of bought..
And then 4th paragraph up from end: "one thing different here was a relaxed air here... " Maybe you want to ditch one of the 'heres' ...
Big kiss

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Ah, thank you. And thank you for the pick ups

<3 a pleasure.