Greeting fellow poet. 🤝
So I usually don't read poems but something told me to give this one a try, and I'm glad I did. I love the message, or what I got out of it anyway. Dreaming is essential, but we have to have the fortitude to be steadfast in the face of obstacles. Dreams are not reality and we must treat it as such. Good shit. 👍
My only suggestion/critique (and this only applies if you want to get better 🙂) is to weave the metaphors together. For instance, what if the entirety of the poem is in a forest? That way all your metaphors add to one another. Instead of falling in the ocean, you fall in a cave or whatever. You get me? This adds another level to the poem, gives in depth, volume, as it were.
Anyways. Good stuff. Hope to read more in the future. 😁
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Hmmm, I never thought about that, thanks for the idea, I appreciate 🧡🧡
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