You are not a regular writer, Jhymi. You are extraordinary. You have a way with words, and it is evident in your posts. Effortlessly, you are good with words.
There's one thing that keeps me glued to a piece of writing, whether it's a novel, play text, article, or anything in between - a captivating beginning! I love it when writers skillfully craft their opening lines to hook readers from the very start.
I should have stayed home. I knew it the moment I woke up. I knew it even as I woke up with an excruciating headache and checked the time to see that I had just about twenty minutes if I wanted to make it to the book signing in time…
Come on!!! I was helplessly hooked from the very first sentence. Your opening paragraph cast a spell on me, and I was glued, my eyes devouring every word without blinking.
I also liked your use of dialogue. The conversation between Stella, James, and his wife flowed effortlessly. It made me feel like I was in a corner eavesdropping on their conversation. I've read a lot of your posts, and one common thing is the use of dialogue. You are a pro. A natural.
I feel sad for Stella. I've never been in a situation where I crossed paths with an ex, but thinking about it alone, I know it is surely going to be weird. And to make matters worse, the new person with her ex is way hotter. Sorry, Stella.🥹
I have a question for you, Jhymi. If you were to write a second part, do you think Stella would get the signed book for her best friend, Marissa?
I've not been in the best frame of mind these past days but I am now so I'm glad to finally be able to reply to a comment that gave me the warmest smile I've had in a while.
I kept thinking of how best to go about the beginning. I'm the type of writer that doesn't really think but just starts writing hoping it would make sense in the end so I was skeptical about the opening paragraph but seeing that you think I nailed it makes me incredibly happy.
And about my dialogue, more people are saying that they love it so I've begun to think that it's indeed true and I do have a good command of dialogues. This makes me incredibly pleased.
Lol. Crazy the things we write as fiction right. You never know.
I do think so actually. I mean she went through her own type of hell for it but I think she would get it.
You're a gem, Kitten. Thank you for this.🌹