Nice to see you posting in Scholar and Scribe, it's a pretty cool community and there are a lot of great authors posting in it.
Great story as always, and well written. Keep up the good work.
One thing I was wondering though, why do you choose the paragraph style you use to tell your tale, rather than a more traditional style? It's not bad - I was just wondering what your inspiration is for the use of it.
I prefer it that way to help the reader for higher reading comprehension. It's a stylistic choice meant to convey the rhythm and pacing of the story in a way that, hopefully, enhances the reading experience for the audience. =D
It's a unique style of writing for sure, and the more I read your work the more I see the benefit of choosing this style over another. It's almost like you can focus on a micro level for each paragraph and design it to work on its own, before weaving in further paragraphs.