I enjoyed this story, particularly the dialogue. You have a good ear for accents and phrases. They make the story more realistic. I also liked the way you slow down time by having the characters bring attention to the clock. It honestly feels like a moment suspended in time. Nicely done!
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Thank you @litguru. I'm touched. Glad you enjoyed the story and thank you for the compliments.
I had fun with the Irish dialogue.