Domestic Violence
So the boys cried from strokes of lashes,
Their body with marks of burns like remains from ashes,
What's the cause of this Brutality?
Leading to glare fatality,
Reduction of human Quality,
Subjects of Unpurity..
The heart is torn apart,
The subconscious cautions "intruder alert",
The body is alarmed,
Fear sets in place,
Thoughts start to race,
Totality of ones self sets a target pace,
These are battles…Ones we shouldn't have to face
The hurt hunts forever,
At the slightest thought... Whenever,
At any given place… Wherever,
We grow over it… however,
But seeds of torture and pain dwell,
In the heart With happenings that the mouth can't tell,
Many have slipped from this course,
Many had fell,
But we cannot buy good morals,
It isn't commodity to sell,
There's so much to say.. But well,
There's more to the spirit than than bruises & body swells
At the end of the day it all boils down to us,
The stop the battering and the force,
To kill the hate & perish the source,
To ease our souls and reduce our pulse,
To sign terms with happiness without any clause,
To wear smiles on our faces & say nay to any sorrowful pause,
To doers of good deeds & bearers of good hearts.. You deserve an applause.
With love,
Nathan Oderinde.
Beautiful poem! Your flow is great and your word choice/diction works very well with such. If I may suggest, adding some more clear imagery helps to pull the reader all the way into the experience.
Nice! Thank you for sharing.
Hi, Good afternoon. I don't know if it's that time of the day where you're commenting from. But my regards either ways.. Thank you for taking time to comment on my post and also commend it, I've been writing for quite a long number of years and a friend introduced me to steemit where I can get rewarded and scrutinised for my content which can help and improve my personal self and the vastly large community as a whole. Thanks for the suggestion on "adding clear imagery" as you've stated what it does which is to bring the reader all the way into the experience. Could you kindly shed more light on it? For the benefit of myself and the community, how to go about it selecting it and What to look out for. Thanks in anticipation of your favourable response.
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