RE: #HHG9: @ainie.kashif Minnow Celebration, Join Us in 'Blog With Love' Challenge!

[rlt47]

ON THE TOPIC - 11

My day 5 entry

Here is another Haiku - Not the romantic kind
https://steemit.com/haiku/@rlt47/an-original-haiku-failed-love

Comments

[poocut]

such is love, sometimes it hurts.Hii @rlt47 the gif looks very heart-wrenching. women pushed men with anger, apparently the limit of patience is gone.

[ainie.kashif]

Hi @rlt47, Greetings from HHG9! Here's an upvote for this lovely Haiku and also my counter Haiku lol :D

Failed Love
Come when love is gone
Missing someone that we love
Faded Like wind blows

[rvag5]

on the topic

We are like the loose wind
In love you win and lose
There is always a good reason.Hello @rlt47, I always like to learn something new, the most beautiful thing of this group has been to know different cultures, I give you this haiku, I hope I have learned something.

[ainie.kashif]

Hi @rvag5, congrats on your first Haiku, so as it needs 5-7-5, yours currently is 6-6-8 so I have made a slight corrections below.

We are like the loose wind (6 syllables)
In love you win and lose (6 syllables)
There is always a good reason. (8 syllables)

My version
Love comes like the wind (5)
Love wins and lose without clues(7)
We long for true love (5)

Hope you will like my version :D