hey man I could see this going some places. though my advice... think of silence as a powerful melody/note.... after 20sec in I would stop the melody... go silent then bring in like boom boom drum track dun dun kah.. dun . ka dun dun.. ka ka then back into the next melody...
you need to be more economical with your ideas... don't just put down all your melodies one after the other.. break it up.. anticipation.. keep people wanting that next bit of melody... good work keep it up... try throw in some different movements and you have yourself a nice song
Thanks, and thanks for the follow as well.