Very first line:
Bjarne couldn't keep his eyes of the
I think you want eyes off the
and so does Mart-One".
Did you mean "Mars-One"
Alpha and Omega, The beginning and the end, and @tcpolymath got a lot of the inbetween. I still don't think I am good at this, but I did say I would try, at least, (oh that/this sounds bad), found a couple errors, just minor one though.