By writing in a single line you can get the whole story out without have to click through. This isn't one of them, not now at least. I haven't seen this style used yet on Steemit. I'm sure the tweet style click bait will show up eventually.
What does anyone reading this think of the idea? If you can tell a story, or at lease build an interesting sub text that will grab peoples attention more to read further do you think it will work?