nice calming and soothing song idea so far bro, glad to have helped you out last time, and don't worry about the difficulty, the main focus is the persistency and consistency of continual practice and improvement, which always comes with time. you have a passion for music and that will take you very far, and you will learn more the more you experiment with sounds, singing styles and even freestyle humming, or freestyle singing/ improvising whatever flows out from your mind heart and soul with the music you are making.
For me, the lyrics are the most important aspect of the music I make, but just as important is the sound vibe, intention and energy I am putting out, thirdly would be great melodies, and fourthly would be sound quality and production.
Patterns can be repetitive or sporadic and random, just try finding different rhythm pockets and jumping into spaces of the music where you normally wouldn't to see if you find a new rhythm or sound that is new for you.
You are improving, but my main notice of your entries is that they are lacking in volume when it comes to your vocals, I need to turn my volume nearly all the way up to fully hear you, I would like to hear you sing a lot louder while enunciating your words clearly but still with tonal control for your next entry, give it a try and see how it works for you.
Keep up the music creating, glad it helps to give you an outlet for expression and calms you down. It has that affect on many of us, music can truly change the world.
Also, it seems you have forgotten to include your lyrics in your post. See you next week! Have fun creating and thanks for sharing.
I agree my friend that the lyrics are the most important aspect of the music. I Am just learning hope to get the words and notes to come together. I started learning poetry So I understand the use of words in a story line. My small microphone does not pick up my words well. I must invest in a new one as funds become better. Till then I'll keep plugging away at improving my voice and tone. Thanks for your advice again and a wonderful week my friend.