Hey bro, I liked your poem. I think you could use a bit more punctuations, but if this is your style than Ok. Poetry is free so don't mind my comment if you don't agree :)
Anyway glad to have fellow poet beginner here. We grow together ;)
Much love, Luka.
Thanks for the feedback and encouragement. I’m still new to poetry and have lots of things to learn, so I can polish and write better.
Yes, giving feedback to each other can help us grow in poetry. :-)