Hi,
You asked for my opinion and it's always a pleasure to share so here I go:
Minimal poetry is always extremely difficult - seeing the picture is never quite enough - so don't hesitate to mix in a few words that do not make sense - or are out of context - a clair obscur so to speak. Please keep on writing - and take good care - love, Frank.
Thanks sir. I'll do that to my next poems. I'll practice writing even more. I really appreciate it sir. :)