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RE: Poem / Just in case I fail

in #poetry7 years ago

Lovely Ethan.
As poetry is about sharing here's just a small poem which talks about what happens when you do fail - the other side of the coin so to speak:

The gift:
I fell down on the floor and I broke my ego
The shock was sharp and painful, I had to let go
The doctor came in and held my hand; take it easy
Don't try to fight, it's only you, life is funny
It'll tear you down to build you up, so gently
The fall is hard but back to start, it's a gift, see.

Hope you enjoy - but please criticise honestly - not pleasing is also part of communication, and learning.

Frank

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I really enjoyed it, all the imagery ties in well and the rhyming is awesome, I'm no pro at this so my opinions might not be the best, but I really did enjoy it :D

Thanks and please please keep on writing - It's sometimes a bit lonely but it's worth it - just mining for words...