From the moment I read this, I knew it was meant to be a spoken-word piece. The musicality of the rhyme is apparent, though, I'd consider cutting it down a bit or seeing if you can't use more subtly in the end rhymes.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Yeah, I know it gets a little muddy on the ending pieces, but it kind of works when I speak it. Again thanks for commenting.