I'm not begging,
fear not,
what was become of you, I think, yet,
let me be your light,
when darkness upon your path,
whose trail with sadness I perceive,
who you deceived?
Warm hello, I wave hesitantly,
thus, it begins with bogus impression, deeply,
away, frenzy, mocking the veritable conviction,
you scorn me abominably,
empathy corrodes, you delineate me as scum,
lowly, derailed soul,
transcendent illusion, blithesome expression, I sobbed.
The sadness heals, scars as white hairs, it endures,
beauty passes, love endowed amorously with prevarication,
shall I rant my adulation interminably?
As we glacially ripened,
our soul reap ageless grace,
slowly we offer our conflicts,
onto the our quenching bed,
we yield at the surpassing age.
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Wow nice galing na Poet! talaga ni sir!
Hayun o, sir julstamban! Thanks julstamban!
YOu are so so so amazing with words!
As always I really enjoyed reading your work!
Have a slithering marveloussss day!
Again, thanks so much for the wonderful comment! Have a happy weekend poeticsnake!
Ang ganda nang alignment ng lines sir . hehe
hayun o sir aclenx! thanks sir aclenx!
looks like an arrow shape great poem
thanks purpledaisy57! Mukhang arrow pero look closely mam daisy ehehehe
I'm not a poet. But I'm hoping to learn this kind of skill. I love reading your poem but i hated the format @iwrite it's not friendly for my eyes. I'm not wearing any eyeglasses right now. ☺☺
para siyang structure, construction poetry mam iamrosallie. bihira ako gumawa ng ganito. naduling pa u ahuhuhu...
😂😂😂 ok lang yan sir. Aq lang naman ata e. Pero the poem itself sold out sa akin.
Akala ko nga baka di lang maayos pagkakasubmit. Sinadya pala ni sir John. Hehe.
Oo. Style nya yun. Kaso d sila bati ng mata q e. Hehehe
yes sir, sinadya talaga, sir iyanpol12. hayaan mo makakagawa ka rin niyan, soon!
You're a great light that shines brightly....
guiding the generation beneath yours...
Thanks sir @iwrite!
I hope I can consistently create poems to inspire others, and continually shines brightly among others who wants to be creative...
You definitely can, sir! ^^
and your ray of light has started to invade my system... in a good way of course.. haha ^^
Sa mga ganito ako naiinspire magsulat ng poetry eh. Hehe
ay sir iyanpol12! salamat muli! makasusulat ka rin ng iyong iyon sir!
ang galing nyo talaga sir..gising na gising kayo noong nagsabog ang panginoon na katalinuhan sa pagsusulat.nasalo nyo lahat ang katalinuhan..
Ay mam katamtaman lang ang nakarating sa akin mam willow1114. Malay mo makapagsulat ka ng tula... di ba mam...
Yes, I need your guiding hand @iwrite. You are like a father to us all. Nice poetry
Thanks stbrians! Just follow your heart when you write poem, read some great poems, use your dictionary and thesaurus, the rest is YOU being the writer.
Nice, may pattern...
thanks zararina!
Wish I can write a poem as what you do. Such an amazing poem.
You can start line by line. Practice it every day you'll see the difference. Bring with you a dictionary and thesaurus.
Another piece na nakapagnosebleed sa'kin. heheeee
naman my friend. makakatula ka rin tingnan mo si iyanpol12! o di ba!
Wow!! You have a way with words!!
Thanks stoutjodee! Maybe it's just a luck. Lol.
wow that's nice
hey roykie1750, thanks!
wow fathom thoughts...wish I could make one like that sir
Yes you can... Practice 3 lines everyday... You'll see the difference! Thanks!
Ikaw lalo ang nagbibigay ng motivation sa akin sir para maipag patuloy ko pagsusulat ko sa mga poetry kahit simply basta hugot na hugot :)
hehehehe basta ba pag-aralan mo ang mga salitang gagamitin mo kung uubra ba o hindi, ang mga tayutay na gagamitin mo na makatutulong mapaangat ang iyong tula, at magpray.
losses spurned, lessons learned...
burnt are the sweet words you often heard...
Another excellent poem,kuya!
weee... thanks jerryl!
Poems that toucesmy heart. ayon oh..ayos sir!
hayun o! salamat ng marami sir bobiecayao!
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so many talented kababayan sis! nakakaproud! <3
hayun o! ako ba iyan, mam nagtatanong lang... ahuhu... salamat mam @purepinay!
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very nice poem and great words.
Thank you very much birjudanak!
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You nailed it once again. 😎
ay lamat mam enjieneer!
Your writing. So moving. Thank you for sharing.
You are most welcome zoocatty!
I love your words, they warm my very being. please give us more @iwrite.
I'll try my best to write as consistent as possible mrs.digitalgold. Thank you very much!
Thanks steemking777!