thank you, @introvertfl for a very astute and insightful response. I use a lot of near rhyme to avoid the sing song effect of whole word rhyme
I also agree with your suggestion about contrasting characters - as it was, the poem came out whole and I left it raw - some will find it short - brief as men's love?...but honestly, a thing can be love;ly whatever its dimensions.
Thank you for the solid feedback
That's a wonderful way to put it. Perhaps you should write a poem on the subject of love's brevity.