Serenade

[johnjgeddes]

a woman
is like a violin?

I miss you

in the loneliness
of the autumn silence,

When icy rain
ticks against the window pane

and leaves rustle
in the darkness.

When the moon
falls behind
the turning night

I miss you,

in the quietness
of my parents' creaking house;

I see your face
in the potted geraniums;

my arms ache for you
as only arms remember...

You fit right beneath my shoulder
like my old guitar.

© 2017, John J Geddes. All rights reserved

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[johnjgeddes]

thank you

[sports-2018]

Thanks for sharing. Love it. Followed...

[johnjgeddes]

thanks, @sports-2018

[gniksivart]

The poem makes me think of a blink 182 song for some reason

[johnjgeddes]

thank you, @gniksivart

[cecicastor]

A very touching poem. Thanks for sharing this.

[johnjgeddes]

thanks @cecicastor

[booster]

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[cyncarlton]

Beautiful poem. How long have you been writing poetry?

[johnjgeddes]

thanks, @cyncarlton - since I was seventeen ...only a few years :)

[girlwithoutwings]

I love your work. Have got a bit behind with reading and scrolling through now looking for all yours and @tinajordan just for good read time :) sooooo minimal yet so atmospheric good work

[johnjgeddes]

thanks, @girlwithoutwings - I agree with you about @tinajordan and her poetry. She's exceptional. I love reading her stuff. Thanks again for the thoughtful responses

[athenabree08]

really nice poem :) upvoted!

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[johnjgeddes]

thanks, but you shouldn't ask for upvotes or site visits - I wrote a comment on your site, @athenebree08 - familiarize yourself with steemit etiquette :)

[littlerph]

I love this poem. :) It's cute and simple yet easily captures the heart. I love it. :)

[johnjgeddes]

thanks, @littlerph. Micro poetry proves a thing can be pleasing despite its dimensions :)

[littlerph]

Yeah. Indeed. :) I truly agree with that. Regardless the feature or element of something, it still would be beautiful. ^^ I would love to read more of your poems @johnjgeddes. I like the way you make your poems simple and yet extremely beautiful. :))

[johnjgeddes]

Here's the secret - try to write mainly in anglo-saxon words that are concrete and made up mostly of one or two syllables :)

[littlerph]

I would absolutely try that. ^^ I'll make a poem based as to what I have learned from you today. ^^ I'm sure it'll help me improve. Thanks for sharing me that. :) Thank you for the lesson! I truly appreciate it. :))

[johnjgeddes]

you're very welcome, @littlerph

[littlerph]

😊😊😊

[orhun]

@johnjgeddes This is supercool! Thanks!

[johnjgeddes]

thanks

[zoocatty]

This is absolutely beautiful

[johnjgeddes]

thank you, @zoocatty!

[iwrite]

I like "as only arms remember..." You are great working on this one!

[johnjgeddes]

thank you, @iwrite - writing stand alone lines is difficult even for well-known writers. I don't think Nicholas Sparks has ever penned one memorable line, so that is something I work on, for sure!