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(I)
Repeat lives verses, written note in terses
your life is a facade, a walking paradox
like uncertainties hidden in Pandora's box
Your vehicle is a coffin
towing a muffin to the river bank of Hades
even when you breeze past the speed of light
you're just as slow as tortoise
Walking on countless kilometers
With broken conscience and shattered speedometer.
(lI)
The road is a toy for you nibbling fingers
Your passengers are effiggies with families
Who would weep and wail
When your car starts to sail on the air
bouncing on the ground like cow's udder
to never again move no more.
on four feet, but crumpled and crumbled under.
(Ill)
The bottle beside the dash board
Is an inspiration to do the unthinkable.
When your grief Is eating you deep like cancer
and dead leaves are flying past, and your hunger to die.
Is at the topmost tip of your heart.
your weary soul is timeless, like the clock
at twelve midnight, just a wailing siren
and. uttermost darkness
(IV)
You are the Empror of the road,
like a toad gasping for air on water
fear is for the faintest of the frail hearted
so why note accelerate the outcome of tomorrow?
When today is ignorant of dawn.
why not tempt the patience of fate?
like a floating man gently falling off a skyscraper?
When not make the steering bleed?
bleed with the redness of your blood.
POETIC NOTES & ANALYSIS
This is an ironical poem that chides drivers for their carelessness on the road eithervasba result of alcohol or as a result of love for mad speed craze, it's ironic in the sense that it uses a tone of sarcasm to totally mocks the fact the fact that road drivers knows the effect of careless driving yet over and over they turn a blind eye to this and at the end of the day they endangers the lives of people, Just like in stanza 2 where people where compared to effiggies with families.
Stanza four tends to speak of the end result of reckless speed and driving, it of course uses heightened metaphoric expressions and also of course very hilarious and alarming.
The poem uses assonance and a whole lot of imageries, it's a four stanza poem with no metric arrangement.
Written, edited & analysed
By @Josediccus
8/5/2018
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JOSEPH C.IKECHUKWU
A strong use of irony, pun and metaphors to relay your message. I'm going out on a limb and guessing the obstructions I met during the read and analysis were from fast fingers or were they intentional and if so, what exactly were you trying to communicate? I'm human and most likely missed the intended purpose.
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I especially love how the poem makes deductions or assumptions and turns around to ask questions to ascertain the motivation behind such a behaviour. Exquisite piece
I'm trying to communicate the fact that fast and furious drivers will end up losing their lives one day, nevertheless the poem is sarcastic, and a warning to drivers who drives too fast