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Thank you. :)

I realize that I missed the mark on one (Guy informed me) and that this is the American take with the 5/7/5 rather than the 3/5/3 which is more aligned with the idea when using English. However, I really love minimal and flash types of writing, so this form is rather comfy in feel for me. These were great fun to play with.

I wouldn't worry too much about the syllable counts - this works great as a minimalist piece, even if it does play fast and loose with the haiku tradition :) As you suggest out, and perhaps Guy said, the units of haiku don't really translate as 'syllables', as we use in English, more like sonic units. Hence 3-5-3 is often closer to the original sense of the form. This article really helped me get my head around it!

Thank you for this wonderful encouragement and the article (and site) as I can see upon first glance that I am very much going to enjoy it. :)