I really liked the metaphor and the way the rhythm carried it throughout. I'm not a big fan of repeating verses, but I appreciated its importance for amplifying the last lines. Good write.
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I really liked the metaphor and the way the rhythm carried it throughout. I'm not a big fan of repeating verses, but I appreciated its importance for amplifying the last lines. Good write.
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed. At its heart, I think it's trying to be a song. We'll see if it ever gets put to a beat. I'm musically
...challenged? I know how you feel, I'm the same way. Whether a song or poetry, this is an exceptional piece.
If you have some time, I'd be grateful if you could check out some of the stuff on my blog. I'm not asking you to comment or upvote unless you feel compelled to do so. I just like to have my stuff read by other poets. Feel free to criticize as well. Just don't write a hate poem about it ;-)... (just kidding). BTW, I liked that one too, even though I was expecting to loath it.