RE: Empty Like Air (A Poem)

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obulunmaz (64)in #poetry • 6 years ago

Totally empty, like air

could be more optimistic :S

6 years ago in #poetry by obulunmaz (64)

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riovanes (66) 6 years ago

Well, the theme of the poem is about empty and broken promises, so I decided to end it like that.

obulunmaz (64) 6 years ago

I really like it, maybe one more hopefull line :)

Best.

goastrighter (47) 6 years ago (edited)

I like it as is.Heartfelt and honest.
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