A demon I've become ( Original poem and art)

in #poetry7 years ago


A demon I've become



You took away my will to live

you took away my heart

replaced it with stones and blood on my hands

Before you here I stand

The sound of my soul so dark yet so pure

A demon I've become

whispers creeping up in my mind

The agony grows strong


You took away my passion and love

You took away my light.

Replaced it with pain and darkness inside

Before you here I stand.

The sound of my soul so dark yet so pure

A demon I've become

whispers creeping up in my mind

The agony grows strong


You took away my freedom and joy

you took away my sight

Replaced it with chains and sorrow inside

Before you here I stand.

The sound of my soul so dark yet so pure

A demon I've become

whispers creeping up in my mind

The agony grows strong


You took, I gave and I'm here to claim

To take back what you stole

Replace my fear with pride in my heart

Before you here I stand

The sound of my soul so deafening  raw

A demon I am in heart and soul

Whispers become screams I act upon

Your life belongs to me



Poem and artwork made by @poeticsnake


 

“I wish I could show you, when you are lonely or in darkness, the astonishing light of your own being.” ~Hafiz 


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"Replace my fear with pride in my heart
Before you here I stand
The sound of my soul so deafening raw".....

So profound words and amazingly expressive artwork... Pain and agony mixed with hope and a way out...

Thank you so so much!
Having your feedback on my work really means a lot!

Much love from your adoptive snek LOL

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Snekky

Lovely poem, I love the smothering darkness it exudes. And the textured artwork is gorgeous too, I really like the colour palette.

I know the feeling of "becoming" the bad guy, because that's what everyone (Seemingly) unfairly expects of you. Despite how hurtful that feeling is, you can't help but play the role, almost uncontrollably. Fine, if this is what you want, then this is what you'll get

Thank you for this amazing reply!
You nailed what I was trying to say with my words!
Have a marvelous weekend!

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Snekky

Awesome Piece. I hope it is not personal. Cause than well it does not look good this place in your soul. Very nice read. I love reading heartbroken poetry :) Thanks for making it for today :)

Thank you SIR (( Giggles))
It sure is NOT personal at all. I just write better when it's dark... Outside and in LOL

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Snekky

Well I was sure it is not :P But just for insurance to ask.:)

this is great my fellow poet...........I like the way you make the imagery so vivid..........you are a poetry movement insider

Thank you so so much!
Your words are super appreciated!

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Snekky

Now the curation project finished you have some more time for your creativity again?
Cool to see, its a beautiful poem girlie!
Admiration for people who have patience to actually make art. Its not something you learn, its given

Its not over yet! Just starting the curation in a different way! :D
Gotta keep myself busy! :D
And thank you! yeah it has been a while for me to be this creative, I am loving it!

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Snekky

wow that was a amazing poem i was not aware about your skill about poetry really love it @poeticsnake keep it up , great one ☺

Thank you ever so kindly! :D

Have a marvelous weekend!

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Snekky

so amazing poem it's really moved me you have great skill to wright sad and shadows poetry great one @poeticsnake

Thank you ever so kindly!
I am glad I could touch you this way!

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Snekky

you have really a great skill and i really touched by the poem like it alot ,good one @poeticsnake

Thank you so much!
I am glad I could touch you with my words!

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Snekky

Great post...Loved the poem and the topic is dashing'I've become a demon..It is great poet by you are very talented and loved your art..Glad to see it..@poeticsnake

Thank you ever so kindly!
Reading your reply made me smile!

Have a marvelous weekend!
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Snekky

Pleasure was mine..

Outstanding poetry. Great writing skill.

Thank you very much!

You do whatever you can do "Before you here I stand".. very strong words from @poeticsnake ... nice poem! Thanks for adding colors to our world!

Thank you so so much!
(( Giggles)) Maybe a bit dark colors but colors they are!

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Snekky

Yes, some likes dark colors. That is why depressive art so popular. :)

Wow great poem..love the way you make this poem so beautifully.and also love your art.keep it up @poetcsnaks

Thank you ever so kindly!
Means a lot!
have a fantastic weekend!

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Snekky

really a amazing poem @poeticsnake really a great arts you had got , im just impressed with it keep it up ..

Thank you ever so kindly!
Much appreciated!

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Snekky

Omg, i am not much poetic but i am interested in it. Your poem is soooo original and expressive.love it.”the sound of my soul so dark yet so pure”my favorite line . Thanks for sharing and amazing piece of art.nailed it.

Thank you so so much!
I am glad you liked it that much! Not everyone likes to read dark poetry these days! LOL

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Snekky

Wow wow!!! Amazing poem with great art...There is no doubt your poem and art is realistic and has a great emotion and feeling...

Thank you ever so kindly!
Your words touched me! Much appreciated!

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Snekky

What a great poem! This is real art. Keep it up!

Thank you ever so kindly.

You're welcome. I'll follow you for more of your posts

outstanding poem with art work @poeticsnake. good writing skill . Thanks for sharing.

Thank you ever so kindly!

Have a marvelous weekend

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Snekky

Wow that’s a amazing poem..you are graet in writing and making art.really great and impressive poem.keep it up @poeticsnake

Thank you ever so kindly!
Much appreciated!

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Snekky

wow u have great skill n art u r very taillent cool nice n amezing poem😊😊

Thank you ever so kindly!

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Snekky

good job dear @poeticsnake, i like your post, thanks for sharing 👌👌

Thank you so so so much!

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Snekky

I'm always trust steemit is very good social media platform..
I'm now byeeee to fb..twiter...youtube..
Hiii....to steemit...

Thank you ever so kindly!
Have a great day!

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Snekky

Nice. I also feel like this sometimes

Thank you ever so kindly!
I hope you will beat your pain!

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Snekky

Awesome poem...i look forward to seeing more from you

Thank you super much!
Have a great weekend!

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Snekky

Man your art is so awesome I especially like the details just keep up the good work and carry on

Thank you ever so kindly!
Much appreciated!

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Snekky

Great writing ,lovely pictures too.check out my post @marlynkeney

Thank you ever so kindly!
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Snekky

Nice poetry&art! I really feel the message of being in pain and distress. The poem integrate with the art itself.!

Thank you ever so kindly!

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Snekky

A demon shaped as snake :P That's new. Great poem.

LOL yessssssssss
I am very scarey at times :D

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Snekky

I know.. I shared a link in your post and got a warning from you if you remember. I thought i will turn into a stone if i do it again. Now i've learned my soul can be eaten also :O
Besides all of these, you're so nice :)

Hey snekky, Wow....Absolutely brilliant poem your sharing to society. I really appreciate your poetry style always. Its would be powerful quote sometimes. Better contribute to our life success. I stay with you anyways for support your projects.

Thank you ever so kindly!
Means a lot!
Thank you for your support!

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Snekky

Bring words to life and describe how one feel. Great write up @poeticsnake

Thank you ever so kindly!

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Snekky

I like your wonderful art . You are super creative mind. I much appreciated your thinking. You are nice artest and great writer . I like your way of writing style and I like your poem .
thanks @poeticsnake for sharing great post.
stay blessed!

Thank you ever so kindly for your nice words!
Great to be smiling while I read this!

have a great weekend
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Snekky

You are most welcome @poeticsnake .

Woow strong words. Sometimes we fell anger towards once we love must. Lovely touching poem. Thanks for sharing. Resteemed and upvoted.

Thank you for your always nice replies!
That really means a lot to me!
Much love <3 <3

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Snekky

You took away my freedom and joy

you took away my sight'
heart touching words indeed
upvoted

Thank you ever so kindly!
Also for your support!

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Snekky

Nice poetry

Great Piece. I trust it isn't close to home. Cause than well it doesn't look great this place in your spirit. Exceptionally decent read. I cherish perusing grief stricken verse :) Thanks for making it for now :)

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What a strange and wonderful creature you are. The epitome of pure creativity in a person, unwed to anything mundane to tie you down.

Nice poem. If you've experienced it, that was really rough.

"I'm a newbie and I make poetry and stuff in English and Tagalog. I would really appreciate it if you give me a time and visit and read my crafts. Thanks :)"

Such a wonderful writing , lovely dark and deep thoughts flowing together in a moody way

Great work! I twirble am a demon too, whuhahahah!

You are quite an artist! I love the poem and the amazing drawings. Your poem was raw and dark. I LOVED IT!

@poeticsnake. Angel and demon, mystical mixture of which we all have some dose. But what gives more strength to your beautiful poem is the affirmation: Before you here I stand.
Congrats.
Have a nice evening!

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Thank you ever so kindly!
Have a great day!

xxx
Snekky