There are two ways to approach this comment - critiquing the poem; discussing the message. Since you did message me with an invitation to critique, I will do both.
Indeed, from Athens towards nowadays, man keeps creating laws, that mainly benefit the rich or powerful. Nowadays, in politics, it is extended - it does not have to be necessarily a direct financial gain; gaining 'popularity' for votes is part of the power game. The rules change but the game is the same. I would like to think that ideally the laws are there to be slaves of men; however, with the inefficiency and rigidity that they are constructed in, men becomes slave to law.
As for the poem, you should take this with a grain of salt; as you say - you are much better poet than I am. You definitely have skill with the rhythm and rhyming; doing both internal rhymes and then applying another rhyme scheme is extremely challenging. However, I do see it as distracting. Yes, it does sound nice and sonically it flows well. Yet, when it comes to grammar, there are many yoda-like lines. It is not necessary bad, it's poetic - but I do find it distracting and at times confusing. Maybe it is too poetic for me, and the message gets lost in trying to sound like a poem. I'm probably inviting you to shred me for saying such things haha - yet I do find that a huge part of poetry is readership. Then again, I am just one person, so my opinion is not as important.