Sea of passion
sea of red
sorrow, hurt and pain
Dark colors
blood is all around
No life, no emotions
no soul, no reason, no regret...
All inside out
cut to death
no grace
no mercy
No body, not even a knife
how, when, why,
what for?
Tears of the devil
No land, no sea
no island
no ship
not even a boat
Hell, death and torture
loud screams of pain and passion
screams of joy and scare
A bullet shot
the man is down...
Broken bones lying all around,
the demons head cut down
He is in anger, but it’s too late
the gates of hell are closed up
No entry,
no retrieval and no exit
no stepping
back
He’s fighting for survival
it’s either him or them
he is dead...
No pain
no mercy
no time wasted
Time is over...
Though the subject content may not be the most pleasant, the poem us actually quite enjoyable.
Good work.
Thanks, inspired by illustrations to dante
Not surprising.
I think you have a great chance in the ongoing Haiku competition: https://steemit.com/poetry/@steemswede/haiku-contest-write-the-best-haiku-poem-and-win-a-book
Thanks, will check it now
People who have been to hell, they say that the worst thing there is - it is the lack of hope, you understand that it's forever
Wow...
Nice use of consanance, Has pretty rugged rhythm that I can totally feel that your prose makes for a good death metal song idea. Way to go man
Maybe you can write music to it? )))
because of this i love steemit and all of you posting stuff
Thanks a lot!
a little gothic :)
Dante inspired
definitely, without joking!
I just released my first poem can I have some criticism it seems you know your doings. thank you
https://steemit.com/poetry/@skapart/unbound-original-poem
here is my post please leave a comment.
:* loved your work btw. up'd
депрессивненько как то ))
our poetry is very nice, a lot of meaning that can be taken
Inferno :) Very good. J.
Oh thanks for the commnet, im flattered @jamielefay!
I would be glad for some crticism too if you wish too (wether now or in the future)!
I loved it! Yes, I promise to support the creative community with genuine feedback as I value the same. x
Very nice poetry @serejandmyself. Images just creates the perfect setup for the poetry
All the emotion in this article came from the pictures. You probably spent longer choosing the pictures than writing the poem.
This critique is blunt but as you didn't pour your soul into your work, it shouldn't hurt at all.
Cathi, thanks for the critique, its much appriciated!
Usualy it takes me hours to chose pictures, for this it was quite quick, as its fairly easy.
The poem is written on the illustraions to Dante's inferno (not to the inferno itself)
It was written over a couple of days i guess
Now I feel like I was mean to you :)
Love the subject matter.