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RE: Introduction

in #screenplay8 years ago

An amusing little piece. I was a playwright/artist in residence for about two decades. The right actors could make this work, but the dialogue feels about like a bank commercial. If you brought in more personal stuff, like maybe a photo in the wallet, or had some outside stress, like a siren, or headlights. It's too focused on the bitcoin to be really believable. Otherwise, it's a solid premise. That's just my opinion though. Good luck on your script, it's a fun business. Have you done any screenwriting, acting or producing before this?

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Your idea of having a picture of the main character's girlfriend (Nicole) in his wallet is brilliant! I will for sure be adding that. I have done video for fun and professionally for about 20 years; though not a lot in the last 7 years apart from promo vidoes and how to videos for WatchMyBit.com. This is my first screen play, though I have often producec/directed/wrote and starred in my own attempts at comedy... this is probably my best one

Glad you liked the photo idea, keep it up man!