I don't normally write fiction and this shows why... I immediately liked the way my story started, but I had no where to go with it, and I wrote myself into a corner really quickly.
I actually thought it was excellent! Really nice flow, very compelling, very easy to keep reading. I worked out it was a nightmare about a paragraph or so before the reveal, so nicely ended as well.
This gets my vote :-)
Haha, it was a nightmare, because I had no where else to go with it, but thank you for the kind words. :)