@jerrybanfield, you're definitely in the top ten steemians for energy expended on the platform. You've done a crack up job since you joined Steemit, promoting the site with gusto.
I agree with cryptographic that the pitch may need to tone down the cash money aspect and focus more on rewards or "the new mining" type of language.
If we promote steemit's cash aspect too much, new users will likely be disappointed with their results, until they find their niche.
@wakeupsheeps excellent point I hope to continue making many different ads that way I can send the message out many ways and see what works the best! Your comment here is helpful for explaining it with different language and focus next time!