Sea of forgetfulness
In the desert of calm in the absence of voices,
witness of forced confinement. Mirage,
plays the imagination and interrupts eventually
the atavistic gift.
Evocation of the will to err,
the sea, brave ally that does not bend his freedom,
his screams and his violent air
caresses the nakedness of the body.
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The flight of the pelican announces
the trance of the trophies
that in his fear immolates the weak addict,
sacrifice accepted in communion.
Hunter with excellent vision.
Suffering of a helpless fish.
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Source photograph N° 1 taken by the author, Panasonic Lumix DMC-LS80 digital camera
El mar del olvido
En el desierto del sosiego frente a la ausencia de las voces,
testigo de reclusión forzada. Espejismo, espejismo,
Travesea imaginación interfecta eventual
de la merced atávica.
Evocación del albedrío al errar,
el mar, bravío aliado que no doblega su libertad,
sus gritos y su violento
soplo acaricia la desnudez del cuerpo.
El vuelo del pelícano anuncia
el trance de los trofeos
que en su temo inmolan al endeble adicto,
sacrificio admitido en comunión.
Acechador con una excelsa visión
Agobio de un peje desamparado.
Reading notes: Beginner
Really wonderful work, corderosiete, and congratulations on your daily win:) I am doing the challenge as well. Come by my blog if you get the chance:)
Hello @prydefoltz, thanks for your beautiful words. I will follow you so that your publication appears in my favorites. At any time, I pass by there.
I will follow in return:)
Wow @corderosiete this is excellent! You must have a poetic soul, my friend, because it does not come off as the writing of a beginner.
I really enjoyed it in both spanish and english, though as English is my mother tongue, this is where I could see the brilliance in full force. Stanza two really gripped me in these lines:
I also love that you are using your own photographs. It gives this piece an authenticity that can be sensed. I'm really blown away by your work as a Beginner.
Thanks @ d-pend your words mean a lot to me. As a beginner, I needed that breath
It's hard for me to believe you're a beginner. LOL. This poetry is very strong. Keep up the good work. I'm excited to read more.
Thanks @acousticsteveo, I recently started writing poetry thanks to Steemit. Although I have always shared friendship with poets. Regards..
Wow!
This poem is deeper than my belief in poetry. You're a prof.
Thank you, very kind words.
@corderosiete se que a te referías con que iniciaste por allí, es nuestro tema el mar, que hermosa casualidad. Bello poema, te deseo grandes éxitos.
Buenas, Sí @sheisana a eso me refería. Creo que te gusta el mar como a mí. Saludos.
very penetrating soul .. beautiful poetry, your poetry is better than me
Thanks @corderosiete
Believe in what you do, the muse of poetry will accompany you. Thank you. We will be in contact, I will follow you to not lose you. You are a teacher
I love pelicans. I could watch them for hours. They are poetry. You beautifully captured their essence in this poem. Good job.
Thanks @firtsteps the sea is my passion. Thanks for your words. Greetings.
You are too modest. this is not the writing of a beginner.
Thanks to Steemit friend. All my life I liked poetry and I never had the opportunity to express myself. Thanks for your beautiful words. I am exalted. Greetings.
Wow, congrats for your daily win!
Thanks, I can not believe it. My first published verse was about two months ago on the Steemit platform. I'm happy Thank you.
Congratulations on the champion of poetry steemit school Brother @corderosieete
Thank you brother, I'm entering and I find this beautiful surprise. I still can not believe it. I'm very happy. Thank you.
Congratulation! A very beautiful quatorzain indeed. Love this.
Thanks @ayahkasih. I'm happy for the opportunity they give us. Beautiful initiative of @d-pend to invite us and show the competition's publications in different categories.
I am happy for this poetry, the sea always take my mind to back, and sing a poetry is a good thing to do in out there.
Thanks @johnrenald I started with my inspiration "The sea". Thanks for your words..
Great to see and meet many people in poetry filed
This poetry is very strong. Well done on creating such a beautiful flow of words and imagery.
Hello @naquoya thank you very much for your words, more when they come from an expert. Very thankful.
Impressive work, @corderosiete, I can see why you won with this & wish you continued success.
I like your big, metaphorical thinking and unexpected way of saying things, painting with words.
You capture life's drama!
Felicitaciones
Thank you @yahialababidi for your wise words. I appreciate your good wishes.
Your piece is wonderful... I love the way you interacts the lines to bring out the full flavour of your piece. I can see, your poem relates personally with you. Bravo
Yes thanks. I live on the seashore and fishing is my passion.