I'll survive(Day 95)

in #steemitschoolpoetry7 years ago (edited)

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Through all the changing scenes of life
When things failed and muscles flexed
When the sun stopped shining on my day
Waters broke and promises feint
People came and things went
Yet still, I preserved

Now the billows roar
Like lions on highways
They lie in wait for me
Waiting to grip me
Off my self
I will still preserve
Soar through
Like an eagle


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I really like the message of this poem. Very motivational.

On thing I realized, a reoccurring word was "preserved", I think a better word would be "persevered". It wold enhance the meaning o the poem I think . Also the formatting could enhance the impact. For instance.
Put one pic at the bottom, ( the owl pic, which should actually be an eagle)

and center the poem so it look more uniformed

Good message though bro, keep on holding the faith.,