Welp, can't deny that I was hesitant to bother with reading the story. I mean, it's really really long. But I know what it's like to have your effort not being recognized after putting in some work on it.
The story is nice, follows the simple heroes journey and offers the occasional plot twists. But I think it needs a bit more work on the pacing. I love long stories, it's just that I like it with more consistency and tension building. All in all, you did good here :D