Hi, your writing is good, but it will be even better if you can elaborate more on the topic.
- You can make an introduction to alcohol first before jumping into the main entree.
- Before explaining about comatose, maybe you can tell some specific about alcohol intoxication. How much is needed for a person to get drunk generally?
- I think you forgot to put your article's references perhaps?
Put more thought into your article, and you can make it better. Good luck and have a good day.
Thank you @chloroform, i will adjust in my next writings