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RE: Storytelling Mentorship Group - My Bedroom

Didn't see that coming. You had be with the whole description of the bedroom and the buildup by selecting the rooms. I was confused, but intrigued when the story started taking a turn. You added a lot of specific details, like getting $10/week for the parking spot. You kept my attention and nothing really seemed out of place until the man showed up in the room, but you already had my attention, so I just kept reading. You did mention that you liked horror writing, and I can imagine based on what I read that you're good at it.

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This is the important part:

You kept my attention

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but you already had my attention, so I just kept reading

Yeah, I do like the old nerve-janglers... I hope you enjoyed it :D