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RE: Darkness, Foe; Darkness, Friend (Original Short Fiction)

in #story8 years ago

Nice!
If I could offer a little advice... If you widen the text by placing a space between each paragraph, it makes reading your work easier on the eye. A big block of text (even like this small block of text) can be made more inviting to read if it's formatted.

Keep going and Good Luck! :)

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You're right, it's ugly to look at. My original thinking when I wrote it was that it was one continuous experience -- one small piece of a child's life -- so it should run together, like a memory. Choosing to write it in that style does nothing for the reader, though.

I appreciate the feedback.