Hey there! I can tell you have spent some time on the idea of this story. I think the premise has promise. I do believe that it could benefit from some proper peer editing. If you are interested, I can point you to a decent Discord chat room full of talented writers who like to bounce ideas off each other. Several grammar issues keep the piece from flowing properly. However, the story does show promise. Keep at it! I will keep watching your blog a bit. Cheers!
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Thank you, I understand that my grammar is mostly off but it's what makes the story mine