In your reply to my comment in the previous post in this series, you said you'd take on the challenge of adding personal, editorial content, and you really have! This is a great post, and it's inspiring me to actually try Actifit, despite my natural laziness and sedentary ways. I'm getting watch with activity tracking soon (which I got for sleep tracking), and if it works with the app, I'm gonna go for it. I particularly appreciated the research into the 10K steps thing.
By now, however, you provably know I'm going to have comments about style and grammar, in the ongoing effort to turn very good into fantastic. I'm going to recommend using Hemingway, even knowing that it doesn't catch every error, and will sometimes falsely perceive a technical sentence as an erroneous one. Going through every sentence Hemingway marks as "hard to read" or "very hard to read" and figuring out the issue can be a great tool to improve your use of language.
And I'll cite a couple of examples, as usual:
"Before this time, I never gave it much thought about disciplining myself to do daily physical exercises." This is a sentence structure issue, the kind that is very common for folks writing in a language that isn't their first. A better way to write it would be: "Before this time, I never gave much thought to disciplining myself to do daily physical exercises."
"There is a vibrant Actifit community I could interact with daily in their discord channel." This is an issue of mixed tenses. If you use "is," you should use "can," rather than "could." If you want to use "could," use "was" instead of "is."
Overall, I see how hard you're working to improve your posts, and it is great to see.
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Thank you for your review, @didic!
So far this week you've reviewed 14 contributions. Keep up the good work!
Thank you @Didic for taking the time to write such helpful comments and feedback. I hope to become an editor like you. It's great that the post is inspiring and can get you to consider downloading the app. It's free. There is no complexity in the app at all. Rather, it is the efficiency behind the app, the community accountability and the little support I am able to give to my Utopian colleague that motivated me to this whole thing. Being an ambassador, I really need to use it in order to promote it and surprisingly it changed my life-style a bit to try to get to 10K/day, so all this turns out beneficial to my health.
I will look into the Hemingway app. The price is quite reasonable. That can certainly help me improve my English which is one of my goals in writing these posts. Also, I am slowly learning how to strike a balance between personal experience and up-to-date facts when writing editorial content for these blog series.
Again, much appreciated and we are so lucky to have you in the team. You have indeed added a breath of fresh air in this category.
I use the free version of Hemingway. If you're going to pay, Grammarly is probably a better choice.