This is really well written.
I feel like I am in a video game scenario. I'm glad you placed the link to your first story so I could follow. Sorry I had a busy week last week but I want to keep our story going. I was really encouraged to read this.
The one thing I would add to your story is a picture. You take take one with your cell phone or use a picture from a public domain place like Pixabay or draw a picture, but it is easier to see posts that have some sort of cover picture.