Hi Zak, thank you for letting us read your work. I find this to be a pretty good start to what I imagine is going to be a long story. If I were to make any suggestion, I would say that you need to add more "meat" to the story. It feels as though I'm reading instead of experiencing it.
As a start, though, I like the concept and it has a nice flow.
Hi there, thanks! Yes it is definitely just a start of things.
Raiders of the Middle Sea was originally written as a pulp fiction piece based in my World of Kedra brand. It will flesh out a bit as it goes along. I wrote this a while ago, but I will see if I can beef it up a little.
I am careful not to have my episodes be too long. Do you think that it was a good length?
Also, there will be other stories that I have written that cover the World of Kedra from other angles. Nations Under Siege, Daggers in the Mist and Dreadknight are among the content that will be coming out. I will just need to gear myself up for all that.