Great stuff so far! This could be the beginning of a fantastic series!
I'm slowly working my way through Oathbringer right now. If the setting and characters of this story were changed, I'd be hard-pressed to tell the difference between your writing and his.
I will say right off, however, that I am not great at offering negative feedback so you should take everything I say with a grain of salt. I really enjoyed this, though and I can't deny that.
Thanks mate - yeah there is a lot lacking in my writing/grammar etc..but I'm just enjoying sharing a story.
I do go back a day or two after my posts and try and proof read fix up a bit - but yeah, I'm no a pro writer and pretty bad english.... Sometimes life just gets too busy..
I'm glad you like though...will checkout some Oathbringer stuff as well :)