Obviously, you are not Stephen King, but you are very close to his literary style. I plunged into reading.
One moment can be considered erroneous: the cashier should have first checked your social pass, and only then scanned your products. This is logical. However, this moment on the contrary adds more realism to your story. This is exactly what happens in life.
Well, I am Stephen King. Just not The Stephen King you're thinking of. Good point on the pre-scanning of the pass. It should have capped out when too much was scanned, I suppose. Hopefully, we never have to find out if it would really work that way.
Well, the Chinese, to some extent, are close to this. At least before the approval of % on the loan, your social rating will be checked.