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RE: Raiders of the Middle Sea Part 1- A World of Kedra Story

in #writing7 years ago

Great start. I can see this easily being the setup to a larger story, and this is a fine start to set things up.

If I'd offer anything, I'd really like to see each segment end at a key point in the story. Make me want to read more :)

I do also want to know more about Kayden right out of the gate. Why should I care about him? You hint about his backstory in the second paragraph, but I want to know what sort of guy this fellow is.

Keep going!

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Thanks for the feedback. As you know I will definitely take it into account.

I wrote this some time ago and the history and character of Kayden, his new friends and his old ship crew will be revealed in time.

I will have to take what was intended to be a longer fiction and beef up the mini episodes. A challenge.