LOL! Yeah, you did for a second, wise guy. 😂
And that's awesome - I just skimmed through it again and the pacing is so much better now! Glad you liked the infographic too. My last complaint suggestion (HA!) would be to add an extra space, or "###" or something similar between the snapping sound and the morning sun, to signal the scene change.So like...
She felt herself falling, then and the last thing Carly heard before the darkness took her was a loud snapping sound.
*** The bright morning sun washed over the cheerful looking farmhouse as swirling wisps of fog arose from the ground still wet from the rain last night.
Can you tell I miss my local writers' group? 😆
Your a gem @traciyork! This is all new to me, never dreamed HIVE was going to lead to so much personal growth and drawing me out of my comfort zone. Hell I only ended up here trying to learn how to get funds into a goofy game (Splinterlands). Now it's my new Facebook so to speak but so much better. YOUR help has been an unforeseen treasure in the journey always pointing in the direction to go with each new adventure. Thank you! I have an idea for another story you might like - It will most likely be titled "The Trees".